Read the essay and see how many points the writer has made.Nowadays people often ask the question of whether we are becoming disconnected with nature. Are we now experiencing life without a natural environment and therefore losing important wisdom found by other generations?
Some people are concerned that our children are growing up without a connection to nature and that in the future people will forget about outdoor leisure activities and spend too much time indoors. It seems that young people prefer to spend time indoors playing on games consoles rather than playing sports. Furthermore, parents seem to prefer to have their children at home because they believe it is safer for them. Recent news stories continue to concern parents about dangerous traffic as well as strangers prowling the streets. Older people point out that it was very different when they were children. People were more active outdoors then and knew more about nature. Their knowledge of types of trees and flowers is probably better than that of people these days. However, people have not completely separated themselves from nature as can be seen in many modern day technology. Examples of where the two can work very well together can be easily seen. Such as solar power and wind turbines set into the countryside. It is important to remember that technology should enhance our relationship with nature, not replace it. To sum up, I think people are in many ways losing touch with nature. Possibly due to worries of parents, children especially seem less knowledgeable about wildlife compared with previous generations. Although we have not completely lost touch with nature we are definitely further away from it than we once were. |
Answer: 1. concerns about young people not doing outdoor activities 2. parents think outside activities are dangerous 3. older generations knew more about nature 4. but we use technology in a modern way
1. What should you do in the first sentence? 2. What shouldn't you do in the first sentence/paragraph? 3. What should you do in each paragraph? 4. Which paragraph shows an opposite view? 5. Is this a formal essay? 6. When should you give your opinion? |
1. Nowadays people often ask the question of whether we are becoming disconnected with nature. Are we now experiencing life without a natural environment and therefore losing important wisdom found by other generations?
2. Some people are concerned that our children are growing up without a connection to nature and that in the future people will forget about outdoor leisure activities and spend too much time indoors. It seems that young people prefer to spend time indoors playing on games consoles rather than playing sports. 2. Furthermore, parents seem to prefer to have their children at home because they believe it is safer for them. Recent news stories continue to concern parents about dangerous traffic as well as strangers prowling the streets. 2. Older people point out that it was very different when they were children. People were more active outdoors then and knew more about nature. Their knowledge of types of trees and flowers is probably better than that of people these days. However, people have not completely separated themselves from nature as can be seen in many modern day technology. Examples of where the two can work very well together can be easily seen. Such as solar power and wind turbines set into the countryside. It is important to remember that technology should enhance our relationship with nature, not replace it. 5. To sum up, I think people are in many ways losing touch with nature. Possibly due to worries of parents, children especially seem less knowledgeable about wildlife compared with previous generations. Although we have not completely lost touch with nature we are definitely further away from it than we once were. |
(see underlined parts in the text left). 1. What should you do in the first sentence? Paraphrase (repeat) the question in your own words. 2. What shouldn't you do in the first sentence/paragraph? Give your opinion. 3. What should you do in each paragraph? Give examples with evidence to support your argument. 4. Which paragraph shows an opposite view? Paragraph 5. 5. Is this a formal essay? Yes. Use linking expressions and formal language. 6. When should you give your opinion? In the last paragraph. |
Look at the text again (above) and underline all the introducing and connecting language that is useful in writing an essay of this type.
Here are the answers.Nowadays people often ask the question of whether we are becoming disconnected with nature. Are we now experiencing life without a natural environment and therefore losing an important wisdom found in other generations?
Some people are concerned that our children are growing up without a connection to nature and that in the future people will forget about outdoor leisure activities and spend too much time indoors. It seems that young people prefer to spend time indoors playing on games consoles rather than playing sports. Furthermore, parents seem to prefer to have their children at home because they believe it is safer for them. Recent news stories continue to concern parents about dangerous traffic as well as strangers prowling the streets. Older people point out that it was very different when they were children. People were more active outdoors then and knew more about nature. Their knowledge of types of trees and flowers is probably better than that of people these days. However, people have not completely separated themselves from nature as can be seen in many modern day technology. Examples of where the two can work very well together can be easily seen. Such as solar power and wind turbines set into the countryside. It is important to remember that technology should enhance our relationship with nature, not replace it. To sum up, I think people are in many ways losing touch with nature. Possibly due to worries of parents children especially seem less knowledgeable about wildlife compared with previous generations. Although we have not completely lost touch with nature we are definitely further away from it than we once were. |
Expressing Contrast
nevertheless even so even though however in spite of despite but although |
Expressing results
because of this therefore thus as a result for this reason consequently |
Giving examples
such as like for example for instance |
Expressing the opinion of someone else
some/many people say it is said that according to |
Now it's your turn.
You have had a discussion on the media's treatment of famous people in your English class. Your teacher has asked you to write an essay, giving your opinions on the following statement.
Famous people such as footballers, film stars and politicians, deserve to have a private life without journalists constantly following them. Write an essay of 120-180 words in an appropriate style. |
|